Hateshinai Iyoku

I'm going to just make another character.

Meh.. Approved

Errr...okay. It's long and confusing. I mean, I reread it 6 times and I still don't get the full meaning of your whole profile, which is kinda problematic, because I guess that other people will have troubles to understand it at all...

._. So, I don't approve of it. At all. Make it more understandable please, because of what I got after reading it this much, I got the impression your character can use blood, bones, other energy than chakra, see things like a x-ray vision, crystal...Which, most of them are bloodlines on this site.

._. so, denied.

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I don't see any jutsus. xD
And also, blood is restricted to a certain bloodline. And that particular bloodline is like... dead. o.o So no using blood. xO And your bloodline hasn't been accepted yet, so yeah. o-o

Genin can only use a single chakra affinity. o.o Chakra affinity = Element, if you didn't know. Use just fire; it suits the nature of Sand shinobi. Although I would use wind; unique to Sunagakure.

o.o A genin cannot use kenjutsu. That's like... impossible. Unless a higher ranked shinobi taught it to you. o.o

So please make your profile worthy of your rank. 'Genin' v_v

Meant to post the Jutsu...but fell asleep. And, I'm still working on stuff. >_<; Oh, and I didn't mean Kenjutsu. Woops...let me change that. xDD

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He was a half vampire, the other half human. His mother being the human, and father being the vampire.

v_v There are no vampires in Naruto. End of story.

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Ketsueki Fukyuu - Hateshinai Fush Sakusei - (= Blood Diffusion - Everlasting Immortality Frame =) This was a technique mastered by all Hateshinai family members. This allowed their blood cells to regenerate them upon any damage, and they could even repair parts of Iyoku’s well being. As such, it could repair a torn heart of lung, as long as a piece of it was still left, regeneration was possible. The main source of this technique was the brain of the user, and it had to be destroyed to end the technique. This technique could not be mastered; the entire user needed to have was a brain, which ideal. If a single cell was left of the brain, the user could regenerate, meaning they would have to be destroyed all together as a whole. Other than that, he would continue to appear, though the speed depended on how well he had mastered the Immortality Frame.

There are three things I don't like in this.
1. It sounds like a special bloodline ability.
2. Can your body create blood at high speed?
3. Cells can't regenerate eternally. There is a limit and when it arrives to that limit, it'll die, along with the body part/whole body. (Remember Shizune's comment about Tsunade's regenration jutsu, after that she got Orochimaru's sword in her chest.)

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As stated, the Regalia he possessed were solely derived from the famed Hateshinai clan, in which the Regalia would be able to enhance the user’s personal abilities, rather than the broad overpass.

Again, this is a bloodline trait. v_v Make it approved first in the bloodline trait.

In your bio:

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The Fundamental being manipulation of their infamous Ketsueki Bijutsu ( Blood Arts.) In addition, he was the first born, and he was more pressured in learning various things at once. He had to learn the Purazuma - Plasma Element as well.

v_v Like Yakate said, one element only. And Blood and Plasma elements have rules on this site...

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However, turning crystal into a crystal form, was sign of maturity, and control.

It makes no sense to me...And what is this crystal energy for? O.o

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It was something, that a normal Hateshinai could do. All he had to do was speed up the blood flow of his own blood, allowing his blood to reach his cells quicker, and prevent him from tiring. So, he had a natural good rate of stamina.

Erm...Making blood reach your cells quicker won't make you less tired. It WILL tire your heart, lungs, veins, muscles etc. a lot, killing you in less than a few years v_v;...And it does not give you more stamina, I'm sorry.

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He manipulated his Katon chakra, however he took it to a new point at a surprising young age. Excelling in controlling natural heat, to an extent, and commanding natural fire, if not spawning them, turning something as a element into an 'art' for himself.

This is not Avatar...

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One of the family's doujutsu, that was based off, or seeing it. It was known as || Ketsueki Metsubou: Fukyuu Inmetsu Manako - Blood Collapse: Diffusion Destruction Eye Technique ||, by using a large surplus of Obsidian, and transporting it to his eyes. This Doujutsu having a natural time limit, which he found out was 8, and found out the hard way was going over it. Which made him temporary blind for 20 minutes. He had unlocked the family Doujutsu, one of them, out of a total of four.

...Four doujutsu? In one clan? Which are all supposed to be this powerful? ._. ...Wow. First again, make your bloodline approved and two, I don't like this. It sounds way too powerful.

Okay, I just commented on your arc before you became even genin...And...It's not normal. Not even Itachi, Sasuke or Neeji was this strong at that age. v_v I can't accept it. I'm not gonna correct any other things in your bio and let you reread it yourself and try to judge what's okay or not.

About your scar draft...Let's see it point by point.

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Iyoku kept an blade for the possibilities of close combat countermeasure. It was known as the Toukon Hitokuchi | Scar Draft |, which this was his blade, that was sheathed at the moment. The Toukon was utilized as a multi-purpose blade, however being strongest in manipulation over blood and bones, the source; however, it sub-part was over Katon, and other factors in his arsenal.

Okay...So...Your blade works on blood and bones manipulation. Bloodline trait, which is reserved etc on this site. So, fix that please~ Also, it can use fire if I got it correctly, so, it makes it kinda OPed in my opinion...

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The blade was tucked away within the male’s cloak. The hilt of the blade was a spectacular Indigo suiting, the blade itself was a visible volcanic glassy, metallic, black, and at the end of the hilt was an Indigo chain, the chain being ten centimeters long chain. The blade was extremely light, allowing him to swing it in a blur to nearly non-visible, and able to apply a certain amount of momentum to rival or even cut through other blades with low amount of energy, depending on how he wielded the blade, also played a factor in the cutting aspect. This blade was infused with natural obsidian minerals and his obsidian.

It's very light, can cut through almost anything, how the person wields it (so, in this case, I guess that your character is a genius with it)...OPed.

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His Scabbard was made of same material, however it was less of a weapon as far as casing went. The component helped in creating the sharpest blade, due to the properties of the obsidian, not only sharp, but the smoothest at the molecular level. Allowing his blade to cut through ‘anything’, and this included one of the ‘hardest’ mineral, diamond, as if it was talcum powder or softer.

Same reason as above. OPed.

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It was fueled with similar energy, being Obsidian; however, it was an external source, and did not come from his internal source, which could act as an assistance source. Therefore, the blade was ninety-nine centimeters long, the blade's blunt side was normal in width, but narrowed down towards the edge of the blade being three nanometers in width, the tip being the narrow and hardly visible point of the blade. The blade if chosen to use could increase his range of smell by five feet, giving him a fifteen feet length while unsheathed.

Your sword is...3 nm in width? v_v Errr...Do I have to comment on that?

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The blade being kin due to the fact that it thrived on blood, craved it even when sheathed away, and for however long Iyoku kept it sealed, it would be up a source of Achromatic Deadlock. The 'Achromatic' Deadlock being able to build up over periods of time intervals, for free usage, which would be every 15 seconds, if sheathed. The Blade was capable of being the ‘host’ of his energy if applied correctly, since this was merely utilized for his arsenal, it was beneficial to him, and what he could utilize.

Uhm...I don't really understand this part...Care to explain please? O.o

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Personality:Calm, Cool, Laid-Back, easy-going, and sometimes cold-heartened and sarcastic. He doesn't mind helping others, and being considerate to others need. He like to train by himself for many reason.

The perfect Kakashi-ish personality... ~_~ please, tell us more about your character...

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Likes:Training by himself, mastering his abilities. Calm areas, and missions.
Dislikes: He disliked noisy, irritating people, that had an ego. He disliked unnecessary violence, he merely practiced so he wouldn't have to create unnecessary violence.

You're contradicting yourself in some way...And your character seems pretty selfish to me O.o;...

About your strengths and weaknesses...He has more advantages than weaknesses. Please fix that~

Thanks for reading~