Kurin Kaguya

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General Information

Name: Kurin Kaguya
Nickname Flaming Skeleton, The Swamps Deadman
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Height: 6’2”
Weight: 175 lbs
DOB: December 12


Appearance:

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A tall man, standing 6’2”, he is pale as his clan always is with two red dots that are the symbol of his clan on his forehead above his eyes. He wears no symbol of the Hidden Swamp, for he donesn't need to. Some recognize him but he seldom travels unless on a mission. He has muscular arms that are bare from his shoulders down with the exception of two arm guards on his forearms. These guards are red and cover from his knuckles to his mid fore arm. He has bone white hair that is short and deep drown eyes and dazzling white teeth. He wears a white padded vest across his chest and ribs. from the bottom of this vest white robs flow down to his ankles. He has black pants below the robes with a blood red belt. Attached to this are two pouches on the back of his robes at his belt level, one is an items pouch and the other is his medical pouch.
The underside of his forearm guards also have a place to hold 2 shuriken where they cannot be see. That means 4 hidden shuriken total in both arms. A kunai holster is attached to his belt just under, and out of sight, in his robes. His sword is kept slung on his right hip because he is normally left handed but has ben known to be ambidextrous. For the last of his equipment he has two scrolls attached to his belt under his robes. Two simple black ninja shoes are on his feet. A small summoning tattoo lies on his left palm where he can easily smear blood on it.

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Personality:
Kurin is a quiet man who enjoys watching and thinking things through. He is usually the one to remain quiet while other speak or debate and then add in his thoughts after hearing all the facts. He plays his cards close to his chest you might say, remaining secretive but wanting to know everyone else's secrets. He Is always respectful to those of higher authority but does not exercise this over those of lower authority. He doesn’t really acknowledge those without skill or promise. He is often said to only show affection for the swamps and forests and his extended family. He cares deeply for his two cousins and try’s to look out for them when he can. Because of them he will act impulsively to protect their well being.
Some say he is hard to get along with because he is always calculating and thinking and rarely engages in conversation with strangers unless he has a good reason. In fact, unless you are of equal or higher ranking he probably won’t speak to you or so much as acknowledge you are alive. Unless you are his cousins in which case he seems warm hearted and wants nothing more ten to speak with them. He seems very joyful and practically a different person when they are around. More light hearted and friendly. But cross him or one of them and he will strike with no mercy.
He is a very neat and precise man as well. Always planning and making things around him neat. Keeping his apartment and the area around him very organized and clutter free. This comes through in his work as a ninja, being very precise and often not creating a lot of mess.

Likes: The Swamp landscape and Forests, Learning secrets, Fighting, The Truth, His extended family.
Dislikes: Hates the Sand, as well as dry and hot places. Snakes disgust him, people using his extended family.


Character Information

Rank: Jonin
Country: Swamp
Combat Strengths: Close Combat, Wind ninjutsu and His bloodline, High Chakra pool, Great speed, moderate long distance.
Combat Weaknesses: his family can be used against him, His blood lust causes him to act recklessly at times, Can't Cast Genjustu, tracking, High level Fire techniques
Equipment:
-10 Kunai
-20 Shuriken
-3 Smoke Bombs
-5 Exploding Tags
-3 Scrolls(One Blank)
-2 spools of metal wire
-Regular Medical Pouch (bandage wrap, antibiotics, a few different vials of anti venom for some rare snakes and common ones)
Weapon:
-His bones

Name: Ra Ken
Type: Sword
Description:

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Abilities: A blade has a mind of it’s own, it loves chakra and searches it out. In order to be wielded one must pay the sword in their blood, covering it completely in their blood. The sword will then will be loyal to that person. Able to be recalled to them if it falls from his their hands. Anyone else the sword will react violently and flaming spikes will protrude form the handle to attack the unknown holder, it will also refuse to attack anything in hands it is not use to. It can only be given to someone form the previous owner or wielder by someone new once the old owner is dead.. It is drawn to powerful chakra and makes it’s wielder aware of it. The blade also allows the user to channel chakra into it and regardless of the persons nature affinity, turning it into fire that can consume the blade and the users hands, without burning the wielder, and allows the person the ability to send arcs of fire from the sword with swings, using more chakra.

Scrolls
Name: Kaguya Legacy
Description: This scroll was found after a raid on a traveling caravan. It will only open once someone has placed Kaguya blood on it. A secret clan history is written on it in great detail as well as containing many known and secret jutsu sacred to the clan, many of which are thought to be forgotten or have never been seen. Kurin holds this to keep the secrets of his clan just that. He plans to pass it’s knowledge between himself and his cousins in the hopes of putting their clan back to their former prestige.

Name: Sosara Rising
Description: This scroll has to be used in conjunction with the summoning tattoo on his palm. It only accepts special and rare blood. One must smear blood over the tattoo then slam the bloody tattoo on the scroll. This summoning releases a fire demon upon the world that is loyal to whomever summoned it. This demon has the ability to spew huge balls of fire from it’s mouth, and is immune to fire. Otherwise it is fairly slowly but extremely strong. A hulk that can take a lot of damage and dish it back. The beast is 12 feet tall more muscular then any man.

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Element(s): Wind
Jutsu: Next Post


Other Information

Relationships:
Close Family Like "Adopted" Siblings
-Kaoru Okamoto
-Hikaru Okamoto
Family:
-Kira Kaguya
-Chiyako Kaguya

BACKGROUND

Bio:
Academy/Birth Arc
Nothing is special about Kurin’s birth except that once his parents saw him they were disgusted by the paleness of his skin and the two red dots on his forehead. They put him up for adoption and fled the village for free of being associated with him. He was taken in by a farmer in the hidden swamp and most of the people raise him of out the sadness of their hearts. A fail bot growing up he quickly became stronger by doing simple farm tasks his foster father would lay out for him. Soon, no one even acknowledged the red dots on his forehead, even though he never forgot about them.
He soon decided the farm life was not going to be enough for him and his father realized that when he got angry he went into a furious blood rage. He decided the best way for Kurin to deal with this rage was to go to the ninja academy. So he did and Kurin was very grateful. Here it was a new world. His farming strength payed off and he was able to develop a very sharp mind. It seemed he had a knack for this kind of work. He was one of the top of his class and excelled in taijutsu and even some ninjutsu. Even with his prowess there were some...bullies in his class. A two boys who were bigger and thus decided everyone was their toy. They always picked on the other students and went out of their way to hurt them. Kurin was beginning to be better then them so they decided to break his legs so they would be the best once again. They corned him in an ally after class and began to threat him, one threw a punch that Kurin caught. He was scared but more then that he was angry that people would hate him for doing what he was good at. His blood lust took over and awakened his special bloodline ability. A few sharp bones protruded from his palm as he caught the boys hand and crippled the boys hand. He cried out and alerted a high ranking jonin who moved to a nearby roof to see what was going on. The other boy tried to hit Kurin with a big stick to help his friend, but without thinking Kurin produced large curved bones from his fore arm as dense as steel and sharp as a blade and blocked the stick reducing it to pieces as he cut through it. The Jonin was astonished and quickly jumped down to break up the fight. After a few attempts he was able to clam Kurin down, and get him to with draw the bones before anyone saw. He then sent the boys to the hospital and took Kurin. He knew this boy was special and deserved to be in a special training program. With his skills...he would be a valuable asset to the swamp.

Genin Arc
The Jonin was named Biki, a very skilled fire user and excellent trainer. He took Kurin to the Kage and requested special permission to train the boy. He explained what had happened in the ally and told the Kage of the boys special traits. The Kage was greatly surprised, everyone had heard stories of a legendary clan who used bones as weapons. they were known as the Kaguya and had long ago thought to be extinct, but here one stood. The red dots and pale skin should have said it all but people had forgotten. The kage granted the special permission promoting Kurin to Genin and sending him with Biki.
Training began immediately. At a hidden location in the swamp they worked endlessly training Kurin in all the basic and even more of the higher class skills of a ninja. He was determined to craft Kurin into a powerful weapon for the Hidden Swamp. As he grew more powerful he Biki began taking Kurin with him on missions. Not normal genin missions but Jonin missions where his combat skills would have to be at their sharpest or he would never survive. One mission was to attack a caravan that had been looting the lands of it’s old treasures of the past. They had to kill them all and bring back the treasure for the village’s vault. The killing was no problem, but something caught his eye...a single old looking scroll with his clan name scrolled on it. He made sure Biki was no where to be seen and then he snatched it up, hiding it for later.
After that mission he spent every night waiting for Biki to go to sleep. He would then get up and sneak off into the woods and read his clans forgotten scroll which held information long forgotten about his clan as well as jutsu unique to his clan. It was a goldmine and he soaked in as much of it as he could, becoming rich in the ways of his clan. After a few more weeks, about 4 years after being taken into Biki’s care and being promoted to genin, he was given a test. If he passed he would be a chunin, failed...he would die. He was to survive in the swamp for a week alone with no supplies while 3 captured sand ninja were released in the same area and promised freedom if they could kill the boy. They tried...boy did they try, but knowing more of his clan justu and the land made it easy for him to evade and conner them individually. It was unfair Kurin thought. They were rats in his cage and he was the snake...even though he hated snakes. At the end of the week the three bodies were stacked by the gate and a blood covered Kurin sat in a tree above them. Biki was amazed that not a drop of the blood was Kurins and he was promoted to Chunin.

Chunin Arc
Now things were starting to get interesting for Kurin. He was very skilled but still a mystery to everyone around him. No one knew of him and he thought he was alone in the world. Now anyway he was a one man team, treated as a specialist by the kage. He was constantly sent on special and often secret mission by him personally. Most were mission that involved much killing. from the age of 14 to 17 this was all he did and in this time others began referring to him as “The Swamps Deadman”. They related his strange bone techniques that they didn’t understand and the death that surrounded him into this name. It was a known fact that every time he went out someone would die. He was beginning to get aggravated and feel very used by his kage. He longed for a break from his missions so he could search for more information of his clan and read more about it. Regardless, he was sent on a mission to eliminate a monastery. He didn’t like this task at first, it seemed completely wrong. But he soon learned that this particular monastery worshiped a demon. They made sacrifices from a local small village that was loyal to the Swamp. Kurin was to eliminate them and do away with their demon. He went and did just that, the priest were easy, and stood no chance. But before they could all be killed one was able to summon the very demon whom they worshipped. Face to face with this beast Kurin saw a greater foe then he ever had before. A huge beast, that they called Sosara, with black smoke rising from it’s nostrils. It surveyed the death of the monks around him and locked eyes with Kurin. It was then that it noticed the Bone sword in his hand. It had a craving for special blood and those who could manipulate bone were extremely rare and thought to have been lost. Here a bargain was struck. Kurin did not think he could beat the beast in a fight, and the beast wanted to be close to the sacred blood that flowed in Kurins veins. The beast gave him the mark on his left palm and was gone in a cloud of black smoke. Thus his deal with the devil was made and another scroll was acquired. The motives were still unclear as to what the beast wanted but it’ll have to be addressed hopefully, when kurin is much stronger. After acquiring this new ...power, Kurin returned to the village and decided he was tired of being a chunin. He had so many people over him telling him what to do and control his every move he decided his only way to freedom was to become a Jonin. This way no one other then the kage a select few could tell him what to do on a whim. He went to the kage and laid out all he had done and asked for a jonin promotion. This was granted under the condition he beat his old trainer, Biki in battle. Kurin jumped at the chance. Biki wasn’t very happy to be fighting his former student, especially one he thought had a chance at beating him. It was a long battle that raged for two full days including the night. Finally ending with Biki kneeling before Kurins bone sword. Biki was not ashamed to have lost. As a reward for reaching Jonin he gave Kurin his sword, the Ra Ken, a blade that was a main reason as to why Biki was so talented with fire. Armed with this blade he knew he had gained an even greater advantage over the other joinin. Soon after teh Kage appointed him as a jonin of the Hidden Swamp.

Jonin Arc
His life as a Jonin is still under way. He often goes out in a two man team or alone on dangerous missions for the swamp. He was a pivotal player in the war with the Sand. Although no one knows of him. He did many behind the scenes work, killing traders who helped the Sand and helped cut off the Sands recourses. He picked up the name “The Flaming Skeleton” some where along the way from his use of the Ra Ken and his bone abilities. All in all he now enjoys his life as a Jonin, answering to very few save the kage. He loves to get away and see his cousins when he has the chance and tries to inform them of the clan when he can. His goal is to restore the Kaguya clan to it’s rightful power and former glory.

RP Sample!
The light rain seemed to get colder as they stared at each other form across the chasm. This man deserved no mercy, yet Kurin felt compelled to offer it to him.
“You can make this easier...Kneel and I will make it quick.”
He wasn’t trying to insult the man, merely an act of kindness from his supposed executioner. This man across from him was convicted of crimes against the Hidden Swamp, and was thus placed on Kurin’s list..and no one lived for long once they were on the list of The Swamps Deadman. But the man had a family and Kurin had seen the sadness in their eyes as their father was escorted outside. He didn’t wish to make this man suffer anymore.

Pain and fear was evident in the man’s eyes even across the 10 foot gap that separated them. Kurin had agreed to giving the man a fighting chance. If he won he could live, but the chances of him winning....well the odds weren’t in his favor. He was already visibly shaking before the more experienced shinobi that was fated to end his life. He yelled as tears sprang to his eyes,
“I won’t make it that easy for you, you sadistic freak! You and that village can burn in hell!”

With that the man raised his katana above his head and jumped from where he was across the chasm bringing the blade down on his enemy Kurin. Kurin shook his head once and rolled his eyes as the man spoke and leapt at him. They always wanted to fight. He stepped back with his left foot, turing his body sideways to avoid the blade as it swung down, buying it’s self in the dirt.
‘You’ll never get anywhere making attacks that leave you so open like that.”
Kurin instructed the man as he brought his knee up with terrible speed, connecting with the man’s stomach, knocking the air from his lungs with an audible exhale.

The man fell to the ground after he was kneed, the tears beginning to fall more as his doom set in and became more clear that he was completely out matched. Reaching into his clothes. out of sight of Kurin the man grabs a hidden knife and slashes out at Kurin’s right leg. Kurin’s caught off guard and tries to move but even with his great speed is unable to dodge the knife. He is able to jump back giving about 7 feet between them, but the knife is buried in his right thigh half way up the short blade. He looks at the wound then back at the man with new eyes. More anger and annoyance then anything.

“See! You still bleed Deadman! Now I’m going to really kill you!” He came to his feet and dashed at Kurin again, thrusting the sword towards his chest. Kuin was done with this man, his life now belonged to Kurin. He reached under his robes with his right hand and took hold of a kunai. As the blade came closer, Kurin used the kunai to parry the sword to the left away from his body, and stepped in with his right leg driving the Kunai home to the man’s chest, just above the heart. Never piss off a close combat specialist and then bring them into a close combat fight.

A small shot of pain went of his right leg from the knife wound, but it was nothing. Kruin tore the sword from the man’s weak grasp by the hilt, causing it to fly back and land in the dirt. A white bone tip began to grow from Kurins left palm until it was a little longer then a kunai blade. His face was hard as he brought his left had across with force, straight up under the man’s jaw. His bone was hard and sharp enough that it forced his lower jaw closed and pierced all the way through his skull, protruding from the top of the man’s head.

The man’s life was over. Kurin removed his bone blade and kunai and the man’s body fell to the ground, a pool of blood quickly forming around the corpse. He cleaned off his kunai and his bone sank back into his palm, leaving blood on his hand which he also wiped on the dead mans clothes. His task complete he left as the heavy rain began to fall and wash away the blood left by the Swamps Deadman.

Okay now time to bring down the hammer

First for a jounin I would like to see an rp sample where we see the fullest extent of your combat abilities. A one sided beating dosn't do much in this example.

Next none of your jutsu have a range

finally these jutsu I have problems with.

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Name: Hells Redemption
Rank: S
Type: Ninjutsu/Clan
Element:-
Description: The user must be of the kaguya decent. After completing a set of hand signs he then needs time to concentrate and gather his power. Then his eyes will snap open and will be completely glowing crimson. Special bones will erupt from his body and he will look similar to the picture below, with a bone spine and rib cage on the outside of his body, with the addition of a bone running down his arm, then completely covering his forearm and hand, while also sprouting a second pair of bone arms from under his armpits. He will gain bone on the outside of his legs as well, from his knees to his toes covered in pure white bone. He will also have a sone mask like seen in the picture below. Also all the bone armor will have glowing crimson symbols carved in them as seen. In this state, Kurin is incredibly strong, his bones being unbreakable, and his speed greatly increase as well. His reflexes are increased and his chakra sky rockets. All of his justu are tripled in power and he is immune to fire in this bone protected state. The armor is more of an invisible shield, covering his body, allowing him to take massive amounts of damage and not feeling much of anything. This justu lasts 10 minutes before it is lost. It drains the user completely, and a week of bed rest is needed after it’s use. CANNOT be used more then one in a single fight, and if used more then once in a single week, the user risks permanently losing the bone strength and never being able to walk again. even for a Kaguya.

Umm increased speed chakra and reflexes? There is nothing that shows how he has gained such an increase in power the bone density I can understand but please explain how those other factors are increased plus with his jutsu being tripled in power we need to have a better explination. For something this powerful we also need a bigger range in rest a week of bed rest after such a powerful technique is unfathomable.

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Name:Yarrow no Mai - Dance of the Yarrow
Element:N/A
Type:Taijutsu
Rank:B
Description:Dance of the yarrow is a taijutsu requiring the usage of the Kaguya clan’s kekkei genkai. The user will protrude 25 bones from each arm and leg and 25 more until they reach a total amount of 1000. The user will then be able to tear the flesh of their opponents at they hit them with any part of their arms or legs. The user can also spin at great speeds to deflect projectiles, and even race at opponents tearing all they come into contact with to shreds. A

Umm there aren't that many bones in the human body o.o

Okay I edited the ranges on the justu, sorry about that I just forgot about it.
As for the first Jutsu, I have tweaked what you have mentioned, as for the week rest I thought it was acceptable because of one of the sharigan's top abilities used by Kakashi was to suck people and things into a void. This was one of the most advanced bloodlines techniques and this is what it needed following.

The second, The bloodline ability allows the user to create more bones, while I admit the number was a bit access, I have edited the number as well.

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Combat Strengths: Close Combat, Wind ninjutsu and His bloodline, High Chakra pool, Great speed, moderate long distance.
Combat Weaknesses: his family can be used against him, His blood lust causes him to act recklessly at times, Genjustu, tracking

Lalala~ You need at least one more physical weakness to balance out with the 3 physical strengths.

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Name: Genjutsu Kai
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: -
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the
effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the
Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the
technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After
forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the
affect of the spell.

You aren't expected to know Kai if you have a weakness to genjutsu. o~o

Your Ninja-Art jutsus are duplicated; there are two of each in there. D:

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Name: Wind Gust
Rank: C
Range: 20 yds
Element: Fuuton
Description: This is a simple jutsu that allows the user to manipulate the air around him/her using the Fuuton element. The user moves one hand or leg and a blast of air chakra follows. This can be used to attack, to extinguish fire of low levels, or even to blast oneself into the air.(Note the Higher the level of the user, the higher the flame that can be put out with this. Nothing over A rank may be extinguished with this technique.)

Do note that if the fire spans a large enough area, wind will only make it grow. And you don't really say how large the gust of wind is.

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Name: Winds Reflection
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind
Description: By forming 4 simple hand signs and pulling the air around him, he can use the light of the sun and the wind to create a screen around his body to reflect light around him as the wind spins silently around him making hims invisible to the human eye. When moving to fast or in water this justu is disturbed and this does not block a sensors abilities at all.

Theoretically, this is impossible unless the wind you are using to make yourself invisible with is hotter/colder than the temperature of the air around you. I studied hour of Physics, so if you doubt this I will enter a huge rant about light rays and properties of refraction and reflection. o_o

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Name: Winds Fellowship
Rank: B
Range: 80 yrds
Type: Sensory
Element: Wind
Description: The user of this technique must have great ability with wind. This allows them to passively sense the moving objects within a one mile radius. as Well as increases their smell and hearing when they choose.

This is A rank. o-o You are sensing objects within a one mile radius and this isn't a kekkei genkai technique.

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Name: Wind Tingle
Rank: B
Range: 1 mile
Type: Sensory
Element: Wind
Description: The user can focus and create a small set of hand signs and then close their eyes, holding their hands as if they are praying. They can then sense movement in the area around them for up to a mile, able to depict the size and form of whatever moves. They can use this to hear perfectly and smell precisely for the mile around them.

... Is this not Wind's Fellowship? o-o;

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Name:Oni Hone Ueki- Demon Bone Trees
Element:N/A
Type:Ninjutsu
Rank:A
Description:The demon bone trees jutsu is similar to the demonic ice mirrors used by Haku. The Kaguya Clansman will place his hands on the ground and in a way similar to the dance of seeding ferns he will summon multiple tree’s that will surround the target 360 degree’s. The Kaguya will then be able to enter the trees and travel from each one and slash the target with any weapon of choice.

Kaguya and trees? o_o Is this not Mokuton? And is Mokuton not unique to the Senjus? And if they are bone trees, it isn't logical that the Kaguya will be able to enter the tree and flick through them. ;x Kaguyas can manipulate their bone; they can't manipulate their skin to merge into boned structures.

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Name: Yuukaku no Mai - Dance of the Orchid
Rank: C
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m ~ 10m), Far (10m+)
Jutsu Type: Kekke Genkai
Elemental Affinity: -
Clan: Kaguya
Description: Using his bloodline abilities unique Shikotsumyaku (Corpse Bone Pathways) ability, the user will can make a partial Dance of the Rose ,break off the petal (bone form the finger tip), and toss it in the air, then, this jutsu fires a barrage of hundreds of bone needles from the petal (much like shrapnel). The needles come at the enemy at great speed and can surround them from all directions. Chakra is utilized to control and increase the accuracy of every needle, making them impossible to dodge or evade all of them.

This becomes B-rank if it's that precise and dangerous.

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Name: Tessenka no Mai - Dance of the Clematis
Rank: B
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Type: Kekke Genkai
Jutsu Type: Kekke Genkai
Elemental Affinity: -
Description: Using his bloodline abilities unique Shikotsumyaku (Corpse Bone Pathways) ability, the user will remove his spinal column from his back to create a flexible bone vine. Because the vine is flexible, it can wrap itself around an opponent to rip them to pieces. Using this dance Kurin will also form a large flowering bone spear. As a whip it is covered in small bone spikes.

o_o Literally 'remove' your spinal column? That's like, extremely reckless and dangerous. And also very inadvisable; you're losing your backbone, and thus losing the support of your skeleton in essence. It'd work better if you replace the spinal column; of course, if you do that, this technique becomes A-rank.

Kazu has already looked over Hell's Redemption, so I won't comment on it. However, it -is- extremely... powerful. I feel uneasy letting you keep it. o-o;

Back for another round, I have made changes as follows and am ready to support my case in certain areas ^^

1. Another weakness added, I didn't realize I was missing one silly me. An I revised what i was saying about Genjustu. He is smart enough to know how to combat it he just cannot use it.

-I have also went through and deleted the copies in my Ninja Art, again sorry for that.

2.I have tried to make Wind Gust more clear, as a simple technique, and deleted Wind's reflection. You right with the temp an air and it's to complicated for most to understand so i got ride of it to avoid problems.

3.As for wind tingle and wind fellowship I have made it A ranked and removed one, they were way to similar to both be needed.

4. As for the Bone trees I don't know what was on my mind when I wrote that ^^
I removed it cause it made no sense with the clan

5. Dance of the Orchid bumped up in Rank

6.Clematis has been bumped as well as re worded to make it more clear.

Sorry for the confusion and my own mishaps!

As for Hell's Redemption It is meant as the "ultimate" of the clans jutsu. It is not something I will use every fight or in hardly any fight. Much like how Kakshi used his sharigan special. When he absolutely had to. Even though he used it more on later in the series that will not be the case here, It is to be used only when absolutely necessary and not on a whim. I have limited it to 5 posts after activation if it eases any minds.
Note: This is the eldest Kaguya thus far and should be the only one to know it unless it is later taught to close family.

Ohai~ Bookwoman speaking here. Be prepared for the worst.

First of all: I like your character. It has quite a well balanced personality, you went enough into detail with your descriptions and you showed quite some creativity here and there.
But of course, a profile is never perfect in my eyes, so yeah~ Here I am to mod it -bows-

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Name: Ra Ken
Type: Sword
Description:
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Abilities: A blade has a mind of it’s own, it loves chakra and searches it out. In order to be wielded one must pay the sword in their blood, covering it completely in their blood. The sword will then will be loyal to that person. Able to be recalled to them if it falls from his their hands. Anyone else the sword will drain their chakra if they try to use it or grasp it by the handle. It is drawn to powerful chakra and makes it’s wielder aware of it. The blade also allows the user to channel chakra into it and regardless of the persons nature affinity, turning it into fire that can consume the blade and the users hands, without burning the wielder, and allows the person the ability to send arcs of fire from the sword with swings, using more chakra.

Why do you need this sword if you have your bloodline? Plus...this sword is like, OPed in my opinion. It has a mind of it's own, it can get back in it's owners hands, it drains chakra from other people (I see here a sword of the 7 swordsmen...) and it can convert chakra.
Fix/Change it or delete it o_o

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Name: Kaguya Legacy
Description: This scroll was found after a raid on a traveling caravan. It will only open once someone has placed Kaguya blood on it. A secret clan history is written on it in great detail as well as containing many known and secret jutsu sacred to the clan, many of which are thought to be forgotten or have never been seen. Kurin holds this to keep the secrets of his clan just that. He plans to pass it’s knowledge between himself and his cousins in the hopes of putting their clan back to their former prestige.

What are those jutsus? o_o and will we know some more of this history or...?

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Relationships:
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Family:
-Kira Kaguya
-Chiyako Kaguya

Dun forget the twins~

And I'll leave it to that~ Since Yaka said a lot of good things too~ Once another council of four approves, you are free to go~

Enjoy rp-ing~

- Booky

To Book Woman!!

--I have adjusted the Ra Ken, It no longer drains chakra. That ability I didn't want to add in there and clearly did without thinking. I have it as a gift from my previous trainer and it's mainly so I don't have to always use my bone corpse pathways. Figured people would get pretty peeved if that's all I ever used and they couldn't.

--As for the Kaguya Legacy, I can add some history if it's necessary, but as I'm sure you know not a lot is known and by not saying it leaves room for other people who wish to make Kaguyas, when time allows, The freedom without having to stay in guide lines i set. As for the Jutsu same applies, by laying out the jutsu here it prohibits people from using them unless I have trained them or given them the scroll. I can add Hell's Redemption though to limit it to me alone if the admins would like.

--Twins addition is yet to be added, Good Catch ^^, I will make a portion of history and send it to you to see what you think and add them to my relations list as younger "Adopted" siblings.

Approval by Mari if there is no other problems with jutsu's or anything asako/yaka see's.

Congratulations~ You are Booky Approved~

Enjoy the rp-ing~<3